Some University students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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some University pupils who show interest
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additional
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apart from
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. Others argue
that is
more
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reliable
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become a good
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shoulder
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believe that additional study is more
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beneficial
for every
student
because a
student
can gain knowledge about other parts
as well as
they can get lots of other opportunities in the
job
market. It is widely acknowledged that by learning about other subjects they can gain lots of experience about
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sector.
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if an engineer
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Sociology he can gain knowledge about our
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society
as well as
he can think about our social problem.
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by learning additional
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subject
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they can get huge
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to get a good
job
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exam
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example
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if an Engineer
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learng
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learning
learn
journalism he
also
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be a good reporter as he can become a unique person.
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why
i
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think that
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part is very crucial to
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success. On the
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it has some downsides
also
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may
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his valuable time to
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distract
detract
from his main goal.
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an Engineering
student
his main
focusing point
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is engineering topic but if he lots of time
spend for
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journalism he clearly can
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distract
detract
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belive
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that if a
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aware
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his main focus it will be not a major problem. In conclusion, By learning another
subject
pupils can get huge opportunity to obtain
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various types of
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jobs
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as well as
make
himself
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themselves
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a
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unique
citizen
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citizens
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.It
wil
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will
very
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helpful for his bright future.
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