The line graph compares the average number of people in the UK traveling daily by car, bus and train over a period of 60 years.

The line graph compares the average number of people in the UK traveling daily by car, bus and train over a period of 60 years.
The picture illustrates
amount
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the amount
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of
people
in the UK using
car
, bus, and train for daily activity within 60 years.
Overall
,
car
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was
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had
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the highest
users
with a significant
increased
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. In 1970, there were just under 6
billions
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billion
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people
used
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who were using
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car
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and it increased that added around 2
millions
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million
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people
in 2000.
Moreover
, it significantly rose
among
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30 years and it will
reached
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a peak at 9
millions
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million
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in 2030.
On the other hand
, the
users
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user's
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transportation
of
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by
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bus gradually decreased which
start
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from approximately 4
millions
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million
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people
.
At the end
of the line graph, it will reach the lowest number of
users
among the three transportation in 2030 which
stand
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at 3
millions
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million
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people
.
Last
but not least, around 2
millions human
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million humans
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used
train
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trains
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to move from side to side of
country
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the country
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in Britain. Just like
car
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a car
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, train
users
went up and reached 3
billions
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billion
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people
in 2000 but it was stagnant over 10 years.
Then
increased for more than 1
millions
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million
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people
in 2030.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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