The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The diagrams outline the stages and equipment used in the
cement
-making process,
how
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and how
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cement
is consumed to produce strong for building purposes.
Overall
, what stands out from the diagrams is that
first
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mix
four
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substances.
Next,
cement
production
making
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makes
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cyclical
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the cyclical
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progression of six stages
cement
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of cement
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.
However
,
cement
must
mix
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be mixed
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with some Water, Sand and Gravel and
pour
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poured
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into the mixer. Looking at the details, with regards
cement
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production and how
manufacture
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cement
with substances. First Limestone, clay, crusher and powder
mix
with
mixer
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a mixer
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appliance. After that, substances
heat
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are heated
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with
Rotating
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a Rotating
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heater
then
grinder
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a grinder
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and
manufacture
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apply
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cement
powder.
Finally
,
cement
should
bags
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by
factory
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the factory
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for
use
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the use
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strong
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building
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buildings
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. Focusing on concrete production, concrete
cement
must
mix
%10 water, %15
cement
, %25 sand and %50 gravel actually small stones with each other.
On the other hand
, int
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o the concrete mixer appliance
then
make concrete
cement
fo
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e .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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