The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The diagrams outline the stages and equipment used in the
cement
-making process, how
Correct word choice
and how
cement
is consumed to produce strong for building purposes.
Overall
, what stands out from the diagrams is that first
Correct article usage
the first
mix
four
substances. Change preposition
of four
Next,
cement
production making
Wrong verb form
makes
cyclical
progression of six stages Add an article
the cyclical
a cyclical
cement
. Change preposition
of cement
However
, cement
must mix
with some Water, Sand and Gravel and Wrong verb form
be mixed
pour
into the mixer.
Looking at the details, with regards Wrong verb form
poured
cement
production and how Change preposition
to cement
manufacture
Add the particle
to manufacture
cement
with substances. First Limestone, clay, crusher and powder mix
with mixer
appliance. After that, substances Correct article usage
a mixer
heat
with Wrong verb form
are heated
Rotating
heater Correct article usage
a Rotating
then
grinder
and Correct article usage
a grinder
manufacture
Verb problem
apply
cement
powder. Finally
, cement
should bags
by Add a missing verb
be bags
factory
for Add an article
the factory
use
Correct article usage
the use
strong
Change preposition
of strong
building
.
Focusing on concrete production, concrete Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
cement
must mix
%10 water, %15 cement
, %25 sand and %50 gravel actually small stones with each other. On the other hand
, int
o the concrete mixer appliance Change preposition
apply
then
make concrete cement
for consum
e .Replace the word
consumption
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