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The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per peron of 11.5 litres.) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per peron of 11.5 litres.) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the
price
 of
water
 needed for everyday routine for each individual in different countries
in addition
 to cost as
percenrage
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percentage
 of average daily wage. First of all, we can see there
is
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are
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 significant variable prices to overcome
water
 demand in different parts of the world.
For example
, Tanzania and
uganda
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Uganda
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 have the most expensive
water
price
 which are 6.4 and 4.1 cents per person
while
 the UK and the US
has
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 the lowest
price
 equal to 1.3 and 0.85 cents, respectively.
In addition
, increasing the
price
 increases the percentage of
average
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the average
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 daily cost
pays
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paid
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 for
water
. As we can see, it is 5.7% in Tanzania but is just 0.006% in the US for each
individuals
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individual
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.
To sum up
,
water
 has various
price
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prices
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 in
diffeent
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different
part
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parts
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af
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of
 the
word
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world
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 which can be one of
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the cheapes
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cheapes
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cheapest
 or one of the most expensive
material
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materials
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according to
 the
counry
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country
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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