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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts illustrate how many portions of
water
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 are utilised for different purposes in six parts of the world.
Overall
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, agriculture is the largest consumer of
water
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 in South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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,
while
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 industry consumes more
water
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 than any other sector in North
America
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 and Europe. Agriculture utilises a significant proportion of
water
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 in Africa (84%), Central
Asia
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 (88%) and South East
Asia
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 (81%).
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, none of these areas allocates more than 10% of
water
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 usage for industrial or domestic purposes, except, the south-eastern part of
Asia
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 which uses 12% of
water
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 in their industries. Apart from the three areas mentioned above, South
America
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also
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 contributes just less than three-quarters of its
water
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 usage towards irrigation,
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, its greater proportion is dedicated towards residential use. In comparison, industrial use makes up a higher proportion of
water
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 consumption in Europe and North
America
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, at 53% and 48% respectively. The second highest portion is dedicated to agriculture and households,
by contrast
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, hold
a
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the
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 smallest percentage in consumption of
water
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 in both continents, at 15% in Europe and 13 % in North
America
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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