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The pie charts below show energy production in Spain in 2008 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show energy production in Spain in 2008 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates how many percentages of different types of
energy
made
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 up in total power
production
 between 2008 and 2017 in Spain. There are five principal categories of
energy
production
.
While
 nuclear,
gas
, renewables and other
production
 experienced some increases,
oil
 and coal had opposite trends.
Oil
, coal, and
gas
 played
main
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the main
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role
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roles
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 of
energy
 sources. In 2008, coal
was
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account
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 for 28% which was the highest portion
in
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of
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energy
production
.
However
, the figure dropped significantly by 11% in 2017 so coal lost its number one position to
oil
 and
gas
. There was a slight decrease in
number
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a number
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 of
oil
 manufacturing which was 27% and 23% in 2008 and 2017 respectively.
On the other hand
,
gas
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 section witnessed a
little
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small
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 climb
by
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of
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 1%. Nuclear and renewables were minor sections of power’s manufacturing in both years. We can clearly see that people in Spain tend to use more renewable
energy
. As
a
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proof
that
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renewables rose moderately by 7% and nuclear’s number
also
 climbed by 6% in 2017.
Other minor part
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Another minor part
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 of
energy
production
 shared the same trend which increased from 3% to 6% in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production, gas, oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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