The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
A glance at a line graph provided reveals the amount of consumed meat including chicken, beef, lamb and fish, measured in
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, between 1979 and 2004.
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, There was a recessive growth pattern witnessed in almost all data, except for the consumption of fish.
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to beef’s consumption is the highest compared to other categories.
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fluctuated at approximately 200
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from 1979 to 1989 before sliding away consistently to around 100
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,
this
is a trough in 2004. In terms of the consumption of lamb and chicken consumed.
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, they had
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homogeneous initial points
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150 grams. But there were differences in the level of growth pattern,
while
the former exploded continuously to 250
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which is the peak of its
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, the latter declined consistently to merely 50 and 100 in 2004. The only show that in the chart,
on the contrary
, the consumed amount of fish is the sole remained unswerving round at 50
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during 25 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gram with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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