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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to English,in 2000 and 2010

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to English,in 2000 and 2010
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The two pie charts give the
number
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 of British
students
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 who can speak
languages
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 other than English at a university in England in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, at the beginning of
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the period
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period
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period,
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 most of the
students
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can
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could
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 only speak Spanish ,
while
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 the
number
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 of
students
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 able to speak German and the
students
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 who
can
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could
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 speak the other two
languages
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are
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were
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 few. In comparison,
at the end
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 of the period the highest refers to the
number
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 of
students
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 who can speak Spanish and
lowest
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the lowest
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 is the
quantity
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number
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 of
students
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 who cannot speak other
languages
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. In 2000, the
number
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 of
students
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 of the first type,
that is
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,
students
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 who can speak Spanish, was 30
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percent
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per cent
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, and the
number
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 of
students
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 of the second kind was 10
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percent
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per cent
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. By 2016, the
number
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 of
students
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 of the first and second
type
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types
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increased by 5
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percent
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per cent
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. The
number
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 of
students
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 who cannot speak other
languages
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 has decreased sharply in a decade. The amount of
students
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 who can speak French
has
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have
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 slowly declined by five
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percent
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per cent
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 year-on-year from 2000-2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, languages, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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