The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to English,in 2000 and 2010

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to English,in 2000 and 2010
The two pie charts give the
number
of British
students
who can speak
languages
other than English at a university in England in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, at the beginning of
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period
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most of the
students
can
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could
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only speak Spanish ,
while
the
number
of
students
able to speak German and the
students
who
can
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could
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speak the other two
languages
are
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were
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few. In comparison,
at the end
of the period the highest refers to the
number
of
students
who can speak Spanish and
lowest
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the lowest
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is the
quantity
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number
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of
students
who cannot speak other
languages
. In 2000, the
number
of
students
of the first type,
that is
,
students
who can speak Spanish, was 30
percent
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per cent
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, and the
number
of
students
of the second kind was 10
percent
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per cent
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. By 2016, the
number
of
students
of the first and second
type
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types
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increased by 5
percent
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per cent
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. The
number
of
students
who cannot speak other
languages
has decreased sharply in a decade. The amount of
students
who can speak French
has
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slowly declined by five
percent
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year-on-year from 2000-2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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