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The chart below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion behind the average money spent on
food
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 in various years, from 1970 to 2000.
while
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 showing whether
this
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food
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 is home cooked or
baught
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bought
 from
resturants
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restaurants
,
moreover
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, the line chart demonstrates the
distributiion
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distribution
 of the
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restaurants
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restaurant's
restaurants'
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food
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, either in
a
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apply
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sitdown
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sit-down
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restaurants
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 or
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fastfood
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fast-food
fast food
meals
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.
Overalle
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Overall
,
familes
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families
 consumed less home cooked
meals
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 over the years from 1970 to 2000, the number of
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restaurants
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restaurant
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meals
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 were
primarly
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primarily
 bought from
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fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
restaurants
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. In 1970, 10% only of the individuals
preffered
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preferred
non-home cooked
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non-home-cooked
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meals
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,
while
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 in 2000, half of the families appeared to
eating
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eat
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restaurants
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restaurant
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food
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. The amount of
food
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 eaten in sitdown
restaurants
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 and
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fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
meals
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were
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was
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 equal in 1970, precisely 20
meals
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 each year, notably, both of these services
experinced
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experienced
 an
upwars
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upward
upwards
 graph until 1990, when the
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fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
restaurants
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 marked a drastic
grow
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growth
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,
overcoing
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overcoming
 other
restaurants
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 and reaching to sell more than 80
meals
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 per year in 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, restaurants, fastfood, meals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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