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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
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There are two bar graphs, the first illustrates the
proportion
 of residents who have possession
in
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a computer’s
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computer’s
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 company from 2002 to 2010, and another presents the percentage of academic knowledge which contained five different kinds in 2002 and 2010.
Overall
, both graphs had upward trends parallelly, the number of ownerships gradually climbed
in
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every
year
.
Moreover
, each range of
education’s
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education
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 level rose slightly in 8 years,
which
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with
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 postgraduate students
gained
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 the highest
proportion
 compared to other degrees. In terms of
the
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computer possession, in the first
year
, it started
around
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at around
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 50
percent
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per cent
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 and increased
approximately
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by approximately
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over
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5
percent
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 in 2 years gap with steady trends. In the
last
year
, 2010, the
proportion
 reached
to
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the max
at
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of
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 75
percent
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.
However
, the degrees compared between 2002 and 2010 which both years had nearly the same trends. The lowest percentage was no diploma in high school, 15
percent
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 to over 40
percent
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 respectively, whilst the highest was postgraduate
that
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 gained 75
percent
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per cent
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 in the first
year
 and ended up nearly 100
percent
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per cent
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.
Nevertheless
, the high
proportion
 contrasted with the gap in each
year
, only
15
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a 15
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percent
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per cent
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 difference in
bachelors
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bachelor
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 and
postgraduates’
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 degrees.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, year, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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