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The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given pie charts illustrate the number of four different
type
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types
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 of transportation
vehicles
prefered
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preferred
 in the UK in several years (1996,1985, and 2005).
Overall
, it is evident that the proportion of private cars
using
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used
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 had
highest
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the highest
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 in all years
whereas
 the
using
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use
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 of recreational
vehicles
 had
lowest
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the lowest
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 value.
To begin
 with, in 1965, the preference
of
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for
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personal
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a personal
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 car's amount was 40% and
this
 proportion increased in the
last
 40 years. In 1985, the rate of
special
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the special
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car
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cars
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 was 55% and it reached 60% in
the
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apply
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2005. Public transport
using
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use
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 had had 25% in 1965 and it decreased until 1985, generally it
shown
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shows
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 that
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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 situation.
Additionally
, the percentage of public transport was 22% in 2005. Lorries and other
vehicles
's
using
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use
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 remained
same
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the same
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 in 1965 and 1985
then
this
 ratio
droped
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dropped
 sharply.
Furthermore
,
the
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apply
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travelling by lorries or
other type
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another type
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 of
vehicles
 became
halfed
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halved
 in 2005.
On the other hand
, recreational
vehicles
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vehicle
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utilizer
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utilisation
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 was 15% in given
first
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the first
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 year and it declined to 5% in 1985. From 1985 to 2005, the
recrational
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recreational
 transport user rose again.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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