One of your friend lives in another country. You want to spend time working in that country. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, you should: •describe why you want to work in that country; •tell him/her about your skills and experience; •ask some questions related to work (wage, salary)

Dear Dilay, How is going on? I hope you are well. I missed you a lot! I'
m
very happy
for
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your new job in Manchester,congratulations!It's well deserved. As you know I'
m
currently living in Ankara. It's a very small town.
Although
it is
cute
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the cute
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city
but
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there are no job opportunities
unfortunately
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. I was graduated from Ankara University
last
year. My
bachelor
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bachelor's
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degree is
Food
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in Food
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Science.
Industry
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isn't grown enough in Ankara city.
I'
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m
looking for a job for 1 year but still
couldn't
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find
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find one
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. I had an internship for 3 months in Danone
last
summer.
In here
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, I experienced
about
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apply
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research and development and production departments. I'
m
really good at communication.How is
salary
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the salary
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range in Manchester ? Do you have any benefit? Health insurance,
addition
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payment etc.
Actually
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I would love to work in Manchester. Can you inform me if there is a proper position for me ? It'll be great if you can help me out on
this
. Say hello to your family. Keep in touch! Merve
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logical structure
Ensure that the letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Separate ideas into distinct paragraphs.
greeting and closing
Good use of greeting and closing. It helps to set the tone of the letter.
single idea per paragraph
Try to focus on one main idea in each paragraph as to convey your message more clearly. For example, dedicate one solely to your skills, one to your experience, and another to your queries about work.
complete response
You addressed the tasks well by describing your situation, asking about the job market, and inquiring about benefits. However, ensuring you cover each point thoroughly will enhance your response.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is suitably informal and friendly for writing to a friend, but be careful with the flow and structure to maintain professionalism.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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