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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The
two
 plans compare the layout of a particular university's
sport
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sports
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 club
in
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 the current moment and in future after specific augmentations.
Overall
, it is evident that there are going to be significant redevelopments in the
sport
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center
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centre
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 in the upcoming years.
Besides
, the refurbishment is going
be
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 more modern with extra amenities for students.
First,
there are
two
 outdoor courts located
at
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on
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 the east and west
side
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sides
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 of the
center
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centre
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, which will be removed in the future
due to
 the expansion of the total
center
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centre
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 and will substitute for a large
sport
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sports
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 hall on the west and a leisure pool on the east side.
Next,
there are going to be
two
 more
chainging
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changing
 rooms constructed, one for the leisure pool, and another for the sports hall.
In addition
 there
two
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 new areas for
dance
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a dance
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 studio at the top eastern corner.
Moreover
, a
sport
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 shop and a cafe will be built for students, each next to the
two
 new
chainging
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changing
 rooms. It is noteworthy that the gym will not be relocated but redeveloped to be more spacious.
Finally
, the main pool
would
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 not change its size and the reception section will
be remain
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remain
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at
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in
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 the same place as now.
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task response
Make sure you thoroughly address the task by providing a detailed summary of all main features and making relevant comparisons where necessary.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure logical sequencing of ideas and use cohesive devices effectively to build a clear argument with paragraphs that flow together smoothly.
task achievement
To provide a full response, make sure all key developments are mentioned, not just a selection.
language accuracy
Check spelling and grammar, as there were a few errors such as 'chainging rooms' instead of 'changing rooms' and 'augmentations' instead of 'redevelopments' or 'renovations'.

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