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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 line graph below illustrates the differences in
population
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the population
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 of
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 and
China
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 between 2000 and 2050.
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, both
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populations are going to increase over the years,
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however
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 the numbers for
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 will far surpass those of
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. After a certain time
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China
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 will remain
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relatively
 stable whilst
India
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 will continue to grow. Looking at the chart in more detail, in the year 2000
China
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 had more residents than
India
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, 1250 compared to 1,000. Over the next 30
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 the figures for
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china
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 will moderately rise to around 1,400.
India
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 has experienced a dramatic rise with the statistics becoming equal to
China
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 in 2030 at 1,400. From 2030 to 2050, the numbers for
India
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 will still increase,
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 time at a slower rate compared to previous years and eventually will stop at 1,600 in 2050.
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,
China
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’s figures will plateau at around 1,420 until 2045.
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 there will be a slight decline to 1,400 in 2050.
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