The bar chart belows shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart belows shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
percentage
of men and women
in
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different ages who did physical activity regularly in Australia in 2010.
Overall
, in all
age
groups, women were more active than men, except for the
age
group of 15 to 24
years
. Of the male
age
groups listed, the biggest
percentage
belonged to 15-24
years
old, with 52.8%
while
the lowest
percentage
belonged to 35-44
years
old.
On the other hand
, of the female
age
groups listed, 45-54
years
old had the highest
percentage
, with 53.3%
while
those who were 65
years
or older, had the lowest
percentage
, with 47.1. The biggest difference was in the
age
group of 35 to 44
years
and the smallest difference was in the
age
group of 65
years
and above.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regular physical activity
  • percentage (%)
  • age groups
  • gender comparison
  • Australian demographics
  • bar chart
  • trends
  • peak activity levels
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • vigorous exercise
  • moderate exercise
  • age bracket
  • physically active
  • statistical overview
  • exercise habits
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