In the future, people may no longer be able to pay things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phone. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?
Especially in today’s
technology focused
world, in the future humans might Add a hyphen
technology-focused
force
to pay for Wrong verb form
be forced
things
in stores applying
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by applying
cash
. All paying
ought to be made by credit Replace the word
payments
card
or utilizing Add an article
a smart
smart
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smartphone
phone
. It seems to me that buying things
by phone
and card
will happen one day.
Firstly
, the majority of people
believe that paying for things
by card
or smart
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smartphone
phone
is better of
using Change preposition
than
cash
; in terms of keeping. Since money
require
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requires
to protect
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protection for
longer
time and it replaces Correct article usage
a longer
between
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apply
people
in communities, it makes the money
is
damaged. Unnecessary verb
apply
For example
, when one person buy
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buys
things
should pay cash
and this
money
continuously follow
among humans. A second factor is Correct subject-verb agreement
follows
reduction
of paper in the world, which the government have to Add an article
the reduction
a reduction
more
cut logging for printing Correct quantifier usage
apply
money
, thus
it causes to be deforestation. Because,
the Remove the comma
apply
basics
requirement for making Change the noun form
basic
money
is wood. For instance
, cutting a tree tend
to destroy Correct subject-verb agreement
tends
in
the Change preposition
apply
environments
but Fix the agreement mistake
environment
card
is made from renewable sources.
Add an article
the card
However
, opponents of people
do not like to give up using money
. In fact, they are old people
who do not know how to use credit card
or Fix the agreement mistake
cards
phone
, and they prefer to utilize Fix the agreement mistake
phones
cash
for buying things
. In the
other words, they do not have any Correct article usage
apply
literate
for using them. Replace the word
literacy
Moreover
, critics of buying things
by cash
is
helpful for everybody when the internet is stopped. In short, the basic requirement for buying by Change the verb form
are
card
and smart
Correct your spelling
smartphone
phone
the internet is necessary. That is
to say, if the net is cut, people
can not buy things
in stores and elsewhere
.
To conclude
, it seems to me that, buying by card
or phone
is essential
and Correct quantifier usage
more essential
helpful
in Correct quantifier usage
more helpful
the
biodiversity than Correct article usage
apply
money
, but if the net has been stopped it causes to
created problems.Change preposition
apply
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