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The plan below shows the village of Pebbleton 20 years ago and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams illustrate some changes in the village of
Pebbleton
 20 years ago and now.
Overall
, the village has changed considerably with seven new features
about
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houses
, footpath, footbridge, community center, flats, children’s playground and tennis courts in the second diagram. A deep analysis of the second map provided reveals
houses
is
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are
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 located north of
Pebbleton
 have three new
houses
 are built.
In addition
, the old fort in the northwest of
Pebbleton
 is replaced by
children’s
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a children’s
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 playground. The other physical structure that
have
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 been added is a community center in between
houses
 and
children’s
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a children’s
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 playground. It is noticeable that a tennis
courts
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 was built beside
lighthouse
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the lighthouse
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 lane in
center
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 of
Pebbleton
. Meanwhile, a film studio in the southwest is replaced by the flats and there
are
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 new construct
are
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a footpath and a footbridge
connect
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connecting
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 to
school
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the school
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in
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on
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the
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apply
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Coast Road near
river
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the river
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 bank
is
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located in the south of
Pebbleton
.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The introduction should set the context and outline the changes to be discussed. Each body paragraph should focus on specific changes, and the conclusion should summarize the overall transformation of the village.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs. This helps in creating a logical flow throughout the essay. You should also endeavor to organize your ideas clearly and logically, presenting them in a way that is easy to follow.
task achievement
More detail should be provided when explaining the changes that have occurred in Pebbleton. Aim for a balanced approach, detailing both what has been added and what has been removed or replaced in the village. This could involve comparing the past and present locations of certain features, describing how the use of space has changed, and mentioning any features that have remained unchanged.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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