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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.

The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.
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The pie charts
illustrates
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 the change
of
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 the percentage
in
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of
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energy
capacity
 in 2040 compared to 2015.
Overall
, the proportions of
energy
capacity
 in fossil fuels
is
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has
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 declined,
while
 the solar
energy
 and wind
source
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sources
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is
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are
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rise
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. The former will remain a major
energy
 source in 2040.
It is clear that
 in 2015 fossil fuels were the largest proportion of
energy
capacity
, at 64%. Which drop to 44% in 2040
as
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well as other renewables
that
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the percentage will
be
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decline by 2%.
Also
, the nuclear power will fall from 6% to 5%.
On the other hand
, wind power
capacity
 will grow from 5% to 12%, which is more
double
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than double
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 in 2015. The greatest change in rise is solar power, the percentage in 2015 was 2%
will
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 multiply
in
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apply
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9 times in 2040, at 18%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, capacity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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