last month you had a holiday overseas where you had stayed with your friends.they have just send you some photos of your holiday. writa a letter to your friends.in your letter. Thank them for the photos and holidays. Explian why you didn't write earlier. invite them to come and stay with you.

Hi John and Mattew, I hope
both
of you and your families are in the pink of health. I just received the
photograph
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which
were send
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by you.
Moreover
, the photos remind me
amazing
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time I had with
both
of you. Especially Snorkelling in Milton
beach
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. It was an unforgettable experience spending vacation with
both
of you.
However
, after returning from
UK
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the UK
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I was preoccupied with office work. I had back-to-back meetings within the week of returning to India.
Furthermore
, there was quarter ending sales
meet
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organised with
sales
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team where I had to submit my recommendations to them.
Therefore
, I didn’t find time to reply to you. I am requesting
both
of you to come to India and visit Indian tourist places like Tajmahal,
red fort
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, Ajanta -Ellora caves.
Both
of you can stay with me during your holiday period. It will be
pleasure
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to host
both
of you. I am sure you will have
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time during your stay in India. Awaiting you’re your quick response. All the best Martin
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coherence cohesion
In terms of logical structure, the letter should maintain a clear progression of ideas. The first paragraph successfully introduces the purpose of writing, but subsequent paragraphs could benefit from smoother transitions and better linkage of ideas.
coherence cohesion
For greeting and closing, using 'Hi' may be seen as informal for some examiners. Consider using 'Dear' for a more universally accepted greeting. The closing is polite, which is good.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on one main idea. Ensure that when explaining your reasons for not writing earlier, you do so in a dedicated paragraph, separated from the invitation to India.
task achievement
Your letter accomplishes the task of thanking your friends for the photos, explaining your delayed response, and inviting them to visit. To enhance task achievement, provide more detail and development for each task item.
task achievement
The tone of your writing is casual and friendly, fitting the context of writing to friends. To improve, ensure that your language and expressions are consistently appropriate throughout the letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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