The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors.
The main purpose of the pie chart is to provide information about the percentages of the various
businesses
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business sectors
sector
occupied by graduates from Brighton University in the year 2019. From an overall
perspective, we can see that bachelors mostly preferred four employment areas compared to other sectors.
It is readily apparent the sector
of service industries predominated among others, 33% of graduates chose to work in this
sector
. The second-highest employment rate of the business area was the manufacturing industry with 16.3%, followed by education with 14.7% and politics and government with 12.1%.
On the other hand
, as is presented in the pie chart the two business areas; science and technology and transportation and warehousing experienced a roughly similar proportion. While
the figure was 7.3% for science and technology, 7.8% for transportation and warehousing. Regarding the sector
of civil service, it was preferred by graduates with only 5.6%. Besides
, the percentage of charity, sport and other sectors was total
of about 3.2%.Correct article usage
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