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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many people think that the responsibility for the combat climate is higher for developed
countries
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 than for developing
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,
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 others think that both
type
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 of
countries
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 have equal responsibility. I believe that developed and developing
countries
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 should
make
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take
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same
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the same
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 actions to protect the environment. On the
first
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other
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 hand, developed
countries
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 have the largest
affects
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effects
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 on Earth's nature, and they should clear after themselves in the same proportions.
From the
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 long time ago, big
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 had the most evident effect
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the
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nature, but now developed
countries
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has
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 even more affection
in
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for
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theie
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their
 activity.
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, developing
countries
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 have minimal responsibilities towards protecting
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nature,
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 developed
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 have the resources and responsibility.
On the other hand
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, developing
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 may have the same effect as developed
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. There is a chance
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that negative affection from developing
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 might be more than developed
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. The reason is
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 the country is progressing it needs more resources than when it is maintaining the same.
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, the main activities between
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variate
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,
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, Kazakhstan is selling resources to other
countries
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, but China is selling
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task achievement
Your essay partially addresses the question by presenting a viewpoint on the topic. However, it does not discuss both views equally or provide a clear answer to the question. To improve, make sure your essay fully addresses all parts of the task.
coherence cohesion
Your essay shows an attempt at structuring and linking ideas, but this is done inconsistently. Cohesion can be enhanced by clearly organizing paragraphs, using a range of linking words effectively, and ensuring each paragraph develops a single main idea. Work on a more defined structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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