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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many people think that the responsibility for the combat climate is higher for developed
countries
 than for developing
countries
,
while
 others think that both
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types
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 of
countries
 have equal responsibility. I believe that developed and developing
countries
 should
make
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take
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same
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the same
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 actions to protect the environment. On the
first
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other
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 hand, developed
countries
 have the largest
affects
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effects
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 on Earth's nature, and they should clear after themselves in the same proportions.
From the
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 long time ago, big
countries
 had the most evident effect
against
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on
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the
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apply
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nature, but now developed
countries
has
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have
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 even more affection
in
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for
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theie
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their
 activity.
Therefore
, developing
countries
 have minimal responsibilities towards protecting
the
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apply
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nature,
while
 developed
countries
 have the resources and responsibility.
On the other hand
, developing
countries
 may have the same effect as developed
countries
. There is a chance
of
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that negative affection from developing
countries
 might be more than developed
countries
. The reason is
while
 the country is progressing it needs more resources than when it is maintaining the same.
Although
, the main activities between
countries
variate
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vary
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,
for instance
, Kazakhstan is selling resources to other
countries
, but China is selling
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task achievement
Your essay partially addresses the question by presenting a viewpoint on the topic. However, it does not discuss both views equally or provide a clear answer to the question. To improve, make sure your essay fully addresses all parts of the task.
coherence cohesion
Your essay shows an attempt at structuring and linking ideas, but this is done inconsistently. Cohesion can be enhanced by clearly organizing paragraphs, using a range of linking words effectively, and ensuring each paragraph develops a single main idea. Work on a more defined structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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