In school and universities, girls tend to chose arts while boys like science. What are the reason of this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed?

#school #universities #girls #arts #boys #science #reason #trend #tendency

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Nowadays, It is believed by some individuals that female students tend to select

arts

Use synonyms

programs in schools and colleges

whereas

Linking Words

male students prefer

science

Use synonyms

. One of the obvious reasons why in many schools and universities girls tend to

chose

Wrong verb form

choose

show examples

arts

Use synonyms

whereas

Linking Words

boys prefer

science

Use synonyms

Remove the article

apply

show examples

gender inequality. Many people from all around the world have an opinion that females can only be good at

arts

Use synonyms

and humanities, which includes

subjects

Use synonyms

like sociology, music and so on.

On the other hand

Linking Words

, males are mostly considered for

science

Use synonyms

subjects

Use synonyms

because they have stronger cognitive

ability

Fix the agreement mistake

abilities

show examples

than girls.

Secondly

Linking Words

, many parents force their

children

Use synonyms

to select the major that they think is the best for their

children

Use synonyms

without even asking their

children

Use synonyms

what they desire.

For example

Linking Words

, many human beings in my country choose their major because of their parents’s decisions.

For instance

Linking Words

, one of my friends wants to study International relations,

however

Linking Words

, her parents force her to become a doctor. I strongly believe that

this

Linking Words

tendency should be changed. First of all, from my point of view, every individual, whether it is a girl or boy should have a right to choose

subjects

Use synonyms

they are passionate about.

In addition

Linking Words

, I strongly reckon that females have strong intellectual skills and are able to become one of the best in their chosen fields. As far as I am able to judge those stereotypes that men are smarter than women should be vanished. It does not depend on gender it depends on a person. In conclusion,

due to

Linking Words

the gender

difference

Add a comma

difference,

show examples

girls tend to choose

arts

Use synonyms

while

Linking Words

boys prefer

science

Use synonyms

moreover

Linking Words

, many parents force their

children

Use synonyms

to select

subjects

Use synonyms

however

Linking Words

, every person regardless of sex should have the right to choose

subjects

Use synonyms

they are interested in.

Submitted by tmargaryan2006 on Fri Dec 22 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion

Your essay lacks a complex structure with clear progression throughout. While the introduction and conclusion are present, they are simplistic and could be developed further for a more profound impact. Use a variety of cohesive devices and paragraphing to strengthen the argument and clarity of the text.

task achievement

While you completed the task, the response could have been more fully developed with additional relevant examples and a deeper exploration of the underlying issues. Your ideas are clear but need to be expanded on to better meet the task requirements.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

11
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

292 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

Societal norms
Gender roles
Empathy
Creativity
Analytical thinking
Logical thinking
Early socialization
Role models
Representation
Aspirations
Confidence
Cultural values
Job stability
Earning potential
STEM fields
Gender-neutral
Curriculums
Bias
Perceived job stability
Economic factors

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

4.5
band
Some cultures value elderly people more, while other cultures value the youth more. discuss both views and give your opinion.
The culture and tradition play a crucial role in society. The elder generation adhere some old-fashioned indigenous culture while the younger population follow the modern culture. In this essay, I will discuss both viewpoints and why I support the youngster's modern culture.
6.5
band
Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?
The challenge of maintaining children's attention and concentration in school is a multifaceted issue influenced by various factors. Understanding these reasons and implementing effective solutions is crucial for enhancing the learning experience.
5.5
band
Some people say that individuals do to protect cannot make difference, others say that individuals can protect environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Whether what individuals have done to protect the environment can make a difference is a controversial discussion point. This writer contends that actions done by these individuals had a limited impact, because they lack government funding and do not have sufficient human resource, although some may hold the opposing view due to the large population of citizens.
4.5
band
Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’ How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?
From past three decades till nowadays, people buy ennormious numbers of cars and megapolisis look like 'one huge traffic jam'. In this essay I fully agree with this statement because one family may acquire four or even five automobiles which means that every citizen has own car but city has limits in car ownership. One of the possible solution is governments should promote through advertising the idea that public transport is more convenient and cheaper.
7.5
band
These days more and more people spend their free time doing dangerous activities. Why is this happening? Are there more positive or negative effects to this trend?
Nowadays, there is a trend among the young generation which involves taking part in risky sports, such as scuba diving and driving cars at high speed. This phenomenon is due to the nature of youngsters who take risks all the time and do not have a sense of fear. Personally, I think these dangerous actions bring more devastating outcomes compared to limited advantages.

In school and universities, girls tend to chose arts while boys like science. What are the reason of this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed?

Fully explain your ideas

Some cultures value elderly people more, while other cultures value the youth more. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

Some people say that individuals do to protect cannot make difference, others say that individuals can protect environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’ How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

These days more and more people spend their free time doing dangerous activities. Why is this happening? Are there more positive or negative effects to this trend?