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People today increasingly use credit cards to make monthly purchases. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #credit #cards #purchases
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These days more and more
people
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 using
credit
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cards
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.the main way monthly
purchases
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this
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 essay, I will discuss about cons. On one hand, some of them use
credit
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 they use it overbalanced to more and more cone. A lot of
people
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 make monthly
purchases
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 they don'
t
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 know they are spending more using
credit
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cards
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. But some of them are not necessary. For the more,
people
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 can have difficulty managing finances because they come to a lot of problems with
credit
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last
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 month I purchased a website for electronic devices. They are expensive and they do not work well.
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. Some of the websites are fake. Who doesn'
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purchase
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 some tiny things but they take our personal
credit
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 number and they can have a system. who is an account and they can take all the money.
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, there are several benefits to using
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 to make monthly
purchases
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. A common prons is they can
purchase
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 easily. When someone
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purchase
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 they can
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purchases
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 automatically.
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last
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 month my
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mobile
 phone bills were paid for my
credit
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 card. Which is helpful for no need to go anywhere.
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, it can help
people
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 when they don'
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 have to money
purchase
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 on
credit
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cards
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. In conclusion, if
some one
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someone
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 using to
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 know about financial management. They can use it very carefully and if someone uses outweigh they can control it and I think more than better-used cash.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear opening thesis statement that directly addresses the prompt question. Cohesive devices and paragraphs structures are inconsistently used, making the essay's arguments difficult to follow.
task achievement
The task is not fully addressed as the essay does not properly discuss the advantages of using credit cards. The balance between advantages and disadvantages is missing, and the prompt is not addressed comprehensively.
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