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The line graph below shows the international student enrolment numbers at De Salle University from 1980 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the international student enrolment numbers at De Salle University from 1980 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
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The line chart provided reveals information regarding the rates of international student application at De Salle University between 2005 and 2009.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the enrolment of International
students
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 from Iran and Turkey saw an upward trajectory;
whereas
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 the
rate
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 of admission from
students
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 coming from Greece witnessed a considerable decline over four years from 2005 to 2009.
To begin
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 with, the number of people from Iran who were applying for the university increased gradually from around 40 in 2005 to approximately 90
students
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 in 2008.
This
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rate
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 was followed by a dramatic increase to around 160
at the end
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 of the period.
On the other hand
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, the number of
students
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 from Greece rose by 100, increasing from just above 20 to approximately 120
students
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 during the period.
In contrast
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, the
rate
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 of
students
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 applying from Greece experienced a significant decline over the period. Starting at around 180
students
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 in 2005,
this
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rate
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 witnessed a sharp decline in 2007.
This
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 figure remained the same in the following year and hovered at around 70 people.
Then
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, it declined gradually to just over 40 people in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment numbers
  • international students
  • line graph
  • De Salle University
  • significant changes
  • sharp increases
  • stability
  • decline
  • fluctuations
  • global economic conditions
  • university policies
  • external factors
  • campus diversity
  • resources
  • reputation
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