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The chart below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relavant.

The chart below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relavant.
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The pie charts illustrate the average share of three kinds of ingredients which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. the nutrients consist of sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar. the data taken from the United States of America. first of all, the portion of
snacks
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 and
breakfast
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 in the consumption of sodium
were
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an
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apply
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equal
14
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%,
while
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 the share of lunch and dinner was around twice and three times as big as that of
snacks
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 and
breakfast
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. in the second chart that contains
saturate
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 fat, the proportion of
snacks
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 was 5% more than that of
breakfast
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 which was 21%.
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, the percentage of dinner
as
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a
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the
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 biggest was 37% which was 19% as big as that of
breakfast
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. the third chart in the consumption of added sugar shows us the contribution of
snacks
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 was around double that of dinner which was 42%.
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, the percentage of lunch was 3% more than
breakfast
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 which was 19%.
To sum up
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, the diagrams show that the average share
in
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 typical meals consumed in the USA contains three kinds of ingredients which may be unhealthy if eaten a lot.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words snacks, breakfast with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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