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The graphs below illustrates the percentage of water used for different goals in six zones of the world.

The graphs below illustrates the percentage of water used for different goals in six zones of the world.
Overall
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,What stands out from the charts is
that
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is that
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in all of
six
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areas
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 they had the lowest domestic
use
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 above the other purposes.
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,
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Europe and North America had the highest industrial
use
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 respectively.As we can see
agricultral
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agricultural
use
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 is more popular in Central
Asia
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as
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 the other continents.But Domestic
use
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 in Central
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asia
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 is as same as south
east
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Southeast Asia
asia
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.
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 in Europe and
north
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 America domestic
use
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almost
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 equal
like asias
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to the Asian
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 situation with a two percent difference.If we check Africa’s
use
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 of
water
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 it can be seen that they
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the
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second after
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asia
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 in using
water
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in
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for
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 industrial
use
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.
as
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 the charts
shows
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, in
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asia
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Asia
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 and Africa
agricultural
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the agricultural
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use
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 of
water
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 is far more than in Europe and America,despite that they
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 more
water
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 in industries and domestic .

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, asia, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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