Some people believe that governments should invest more in improving public transportation systems to reduce traffic congestion and air pollution. Others argue that individuals should take responsibility for reducing traffic problems by using public transport. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Transportation is increasing day by day with the
icrease
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increase
in population simultaneously increasing
pollution
.
Actually
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public
transport
is not so active and easily available in India. Primarily, it is the duty of the government to make public
transport
easily available at working hours regularly.
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,
public
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the public
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should
also
use
less
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fewer
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private
vehicles
for reducing
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to reduce
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the
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apply
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pollution
. As the population is increasing, the transportation is
also
increasing
accordingly
. The governments should make policies to make
use
of public
transport
to reduce the production of air
pollution
. Public
transport
should be available on time for
office going
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employees like doctors, engineers, lawyers, teachers, shopkeepers etc. Generally public
believe
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on
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in
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private
vehicles
, not
on
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in
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public
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the public
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transport
system. If anyone uses public
transport
and if anyhow he fails to reach on time
than
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then
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it becomes a
rumor
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of the city or village.
As a
result
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result,
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people
start to
use
own
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their own
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vehicle
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vehicles
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resulting in
the
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apply
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more air
pollution
.
People
who live in remote areas like farmers, hilly areas
people
, poor
people
etc are dependent on the
use
of public
transport
as they can not afford private
vehicles
. Elderly
people
who are unable to drive the
vehicles
also
depend on public
transport
. So in remote
areas
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areas,
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air
pollution
is very less. In the end, it is the duty of the government to implement strong laws for transportation and should launch public programmes
by
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through
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social media,
newspaper
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newspapers
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etc. to
make
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raise
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awareness
in
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apply
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the
people
for
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apply
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using
vehicle
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vehicles
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in limited
way
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ways
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.
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