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Some people believe that governments should invest more in improving public transportation systems to reduce traffic congestion and air pollution. Others argue that individuals should take responsibility for reducing traffic problems by using public transport. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Transportation is increasing day by day with the
icrease
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increase
 in population simultaneously increasing
pollution
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.
Actually
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 public
transport
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 is not so active and easily available in India. Primarily, it is the duty of the government to make public
transport
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 easily available at working hours regularly.
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,
public
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the public
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 should
also
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use
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less
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fewer
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 private
vehicles
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for reducing
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the
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pollution
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. As the population is increasing, the transportation is
also
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 increasing
accordingly
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. The governments should make policies to make
use
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 of public
transport
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 to reduce the production of air
pollution
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. Public
transport
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 should be available on time for
office going
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 employees like doctors, engineers, lawyers, teachers, shopkeepers etc. Generally public
believe
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on
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in
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 private
vehicles
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, not
on
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in
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public
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the public
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transport
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 system. If anyone uses public
transport
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 and if anyhow he fails to reach on time
than
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then
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 it becomes a
rumor
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 of the city or village.
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result
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people
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 start to
use
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own
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their own
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 resulting in
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more air
pollution
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People
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 who live in remote areas like farmers, hilly areas
people
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, poor
people
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 etc are dependent on the
use
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 of public
transport
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 as they can not afford private
vehicles
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. Elderly
people
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 who are unable to drive the
vehicles
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also
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 depend on public
transport
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. So in remote
areas
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areas,
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 air
pollution
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 is very less. In the end, it is the duty of the government to implement strong laws for transportation and should launch public programmes
by
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through
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 social media,
newspaper
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newspapers
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 etc. to
make
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raise
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 awareness
in
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apply
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the
people
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for
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apply
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using
vehicle
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vehicles
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 in limited
way
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ways
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear introductory paragraph that introduces the topic and previews the main points to be discussed. Follow a logical structure with clear paragraphs, each containing one main idea with supporting details. Use cohesive devices effectively to connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task by discussing both views presented in the prompt and providing your own opinion. Offer a balanced discussion and make sure your personal stance is clear and well supported by arguments. Refer to the prompt throughout the essay to remain focused on the task.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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