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The line graphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.

The line graphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.
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The charts illustrate the generation and request for
steel
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 in
million
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 tons and the number of individuals working for the
steel
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 industry in the UK in the whole
year
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 of 2010. looking from an
overall
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 perspective it is readily apparent that the production of
steel
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 during the whole
year
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although
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 had fluctuation, showed a downward trend,
in contrast
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, the demand figure witnessed an upward trend during the given
year
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. From the given graph it can be seen that
steel
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 generation in January was about 4000
million
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tonnes
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 during 4
months
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 it experienced a sharp increase which reached a peak of nearly 5000
million
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tonnes
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 after that it decreased to 4000
million
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tonnes
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 and it remained unchanged during about 4
months
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 after that figure displays decline to just over 3000
million
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tonnes
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 by the August
then
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 production of
steel
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 reached to the highest point again to approximately 5000
million
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tonnes
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 by the following two month after that it plunge to just under 1000
million
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tonnes
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 in December.
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, the demand figure witnessed a variation from January to August which throughout these
months
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 it rose to the highest point of almost 3000
million
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tonnes
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 and the lowest point of fewer than 2000
million
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tonnes
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, but it showed a substantial decrease to nearly 0
million
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tonnes
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 in
last
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 two
months
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 of the given
year
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 and
then
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 it rocket to 2000
million
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tonnes
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 in December.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words steel, million, year, tonnes, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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