The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other language in addition to English in 2000 and 2010

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other language in addition to English in 2000 and 2010
The charts give information about the
percentage
of England pupils at
one
institute,in the UK who can communicate in other languages,
in addition
to English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
,It is explicit that the Spanish
language
speaking
percentage
by English
students
at
one
university was more than 30 % in both years 2000 and 2010. In detail,It stands out that,30% of pupils from
one
university could speak Spanish in England in 2000,as compared to
the
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35% of
students
can speak the same
language
in 2010 in England.15% of pupils could speak another
language
, at
one
university in 2000,Which increased to 20% in 2010 in the UK.The proportion of
students
,who can speak,another two languages
also
rose from 10%(2000) to 15% in 2010.
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on the other hand
,the
percentage
of
students
at
one
institution in Britain who could speak no other
language
decreased from 20% in 2000 to 10% in 2010.The French speaker's proportion
also
dropped from 15% to 10%,from 2000 to 2010 respectively.
However
,
students
percentage
who can speak
German
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language
, remained at 10% the same in both
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years 2000 and 2010.
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