The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown Below. Leisure time in a typical week in hours – by sex and employment status, 1998-99.
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The bar graph illustrates
male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
who spent their spare Fix the agreement mistake
females
time
in a week
in the year of
1998-99. In Change preposition
apply
this
chart, various status
are available like employed, Fix the agreement mistake
statuses
part
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part-time
time
employee, unemployed, retired and housewiwes
.
First of all, men and women who were employed and working Correct your spelling
housewives
as
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apply
a
full Correct article usage
apply
time
hence
, they had less time
than unemplyed
and retired Correct your spelling
unemployed
people
. Around 45 hours
got
by men and Wrong verb form
were spent
near to
40 Correct your spelling
nearly
hours
were get
by women in a particular Verb problem
spent
week
who were full
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full-time
time
employee
. There Fix the agreement mistake
employees
are
no data Correct subject-verb agreement
is
was
available for Unnecessary verb
apply
female
who worked Fix the agreement mistake
females
part
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part-time
time
. Therefore
, men got 40 hours
in part
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part-time
time
to enjoy their leisure time
. Almost 50% of a week
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week's
hours
were got
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worked for
who
were unemployed(male-85 Correct pronoun usage
those who
hours
and female-79 hours
) and retired(male-82 hours
and female-79 hours
). Retired and employed people
got more hours
rather than full
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full-time
time
and part
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part-time
time
workers. Housewives who did
worked Unnecessary verb
apply
for
home, Change preposition
at
they
had 50 Correct pronoun usage
apply
hours
spare
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of spare
time
in
a Change preposition
apply
week
.
To commence with, it can be seen that employed people
could got
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get
be got
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
hours
to spend in enjoy time
than people
who were umemployed
, retired and housewives.Correct your spelling
unemployed
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, week, part, people, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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