The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown Below. Leisure time in a typical week in hours – by sex and employment status, 1998-99.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown 

Below.

Leisure time in a typical week in hours –

by sex and employment status, 1998-99.
The bar graph illustrates
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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who spent their spare
time
in a
week
in the year
of
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1998-99. In
this
chart, various
status
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statuses
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are available like employed,
part
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part-time
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time
employee, unemployed, retired and
housewiwes
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housewives
. First of all, men and women who were employed and working
as
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a
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full
time
hence
, they had less
time
than
unemplyed
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unemployed
and retired
people
. Around 45
hours
got
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were spent
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by men and
near to
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nearly
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40
hours
were
get
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spent
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by women in a particular
week
who were
full
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full-time
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time
employee
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employees
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. There
are
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is
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no data
was
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available for
female
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females
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who worked
part
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part-time
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time
.
Therefore
, men got 40
hours
in
part
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part-time
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time
to enjoy their leisure
time
. Almost 50% of a
week
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week's
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hours
were
got
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worked for
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who
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those who
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were unemployed(male-85
hours
and female-79
hours
) and retired(male-82
hours
and female-79
hours
). Retired and employed
people
got more
hours
rather than
full
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full-time
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time
and
part
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part-time
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time
workers. Housewives who
did
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worked
for
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at
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home,
they
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apply
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had 50
hours
spare
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of spare
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time
in
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a
week
. To commence with, it can be seen that employed
people
could
got
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get
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less
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fewer
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hours
to spend in enjoy
time
than
people
who were
umemployed
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unemployed
, retired and housewives.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, week, part, people, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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