The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the facilities of a major university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the number in
percent
of male and female academic workers from several majors in 2012. Change the spelling
per cent
Overall
, the graph shows that the majority of staff
members is
male Change the verb form
are
altough
in some major, the Correct your spelling
although
percentage
of female staffs
is higher than the male.
The Fix the agreement mistake
staff
percentage
of academic staff
members vary
from 18% to 85%. In Engineering Correct subject-verb agreement
varies
major
, Fix the agreement mistake
majors
male
Add an article
the male
staff
is the most dominating gender. At exactly
85%, Change preposition
Exactly
the
workers in engineering Change preposition
of the
is
male, Change the verb form
are
than
the other 18% Correct word choice
and
is
female. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Furthermore
, in any other major like business, law, and science, the percentage
of male staff
is same
or over 60%. Meanwhile, the number of female workers Correct article usage
the same
are
higher in the Change the verb form
is
major
of arts, education, and medicine. Female Fix the agreement mistake
majors
staffs
are the majority in education major reaching the Fix the agreement mistake
staff
percentage
nearly three quarters. There are slightly
Change the adverb
slight
difference
between the number of female and male Fix the agreement mistake
differences
staff
, 50% and 49% respectively.Submitted by mmmuuu on
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