You have a problem with the computer at the office which has affected your work Write a letter to your manager and say What problem do you have What difficulties does this create for you What could be done about it.

Dear Mr. Rayansh , I am Pallavi working in
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Department as a Senior Talent Acquisition in your organisation.
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would like to bring
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your notice that my computer
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not working properly since
last
week . Even though
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have raised the ticket in
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department but still
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issue has not been resolved .
This
laptop
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issued to me at
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of my joining almost six years ago . I believe before iME someone else was using
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. There are many problems with my device
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my computer screen turns black automatically within
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hour from starting time and it is not even showing any
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on the screen and
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key words
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are not working properly .
Therefore
, because of
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i
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can not save my daily work which leads a frustration and l
also
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my focus
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my work. As a part of my job ,
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have to find the candidates on
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portal to close all positions in the organisation .
Additionally
, I have to maintain the data and send those reports to my manager on
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basis which is not possible without
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.
this
reason
also
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my work productivity. Request you to please allow me to use my personal laptop
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premises
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until
this
issue is resolved or replace my laptop so that
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can perform my job
responsiblities
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responsibilities
well. Regards Pallavi
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logical structure
Ensure that the letter has a clear structure, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, each serving a distinct purpose.
greeting and closing
Work on correctly formatting greetings and sign-offs in formal letters; for instance, use a comma after the salutation 'Dear Mr. Rayansh,' and end the letter with a formal sign-off followed by a comma.
single idea per paragraph
Maintain a singular focus in each paragraph to convey your message cleanly and without confusion, which you have handled well in this letter.
complete response
Address all parts of the prompt clearly, providing specific details to increase the response's effectiveness.
suitable writing tone
Adopt a consistently formal tone suitable for the workplace, avoiding casual language and ensuring the use of professional formulations, including mentioning your designation and department up front.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • secondly
  • thirdly
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  • moreover
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  • therefore
  • however
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  • even though
  • despite

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