The pie chart below shows the main reasons Why agricultural land becomes less productive.The table shows how these causes affected three reguons of the world during the 1919s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons  Why agricultural land becomes less productive.The table shows how these causes affected three reguons of the world during the 1919s.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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information
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reasons why agricultural
land
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becomes less productive. The reasons are mainly caused by over-grazing, deforestation,
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and other activities. 35% of
land
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degradation
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by overgrazing, 30%
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by deforestation, 28%
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by
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and only 7%
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by other events. The table shows that from 3
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,
Europe
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agricultural
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degraded
the most by 23%. Taken over agricultural
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. 9,8%
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land
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because of deforestation, 7,7% because of
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and 5,5% caused by over-grazing. Following Europe,
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land
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by 13%. Mainly caused by over-grazing. And
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in North America,
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contributor
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degradation impacted by
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. North
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land
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got the lowest total
land
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degradation only by 5%. We can conclude that
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agricultural
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needed to
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for agricultural beneficial purposes.
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