The pie chart below shows the main reasons Why agricultural land becomes less productive.The table shows how these causes affected three reguons of the world during the 1919s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The pie chart provided,
give
information Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
of
reasons why agricultural Change preposition
on
land
becomes less productive. The reasons are mainly caused by over-grazing, deforestation, over-cultivation
and other activities.
35% of land
degradation caused
by overgrazing, 30% Add a missing verb
is caused
caused
by deforestation, 28% Add a missing verb
is caused
caused
by Add a missing verb
is caused
over-cultivation
and only 7% caused
by other events.
The table shows that from 3 Add a missing verb
is caused
country
, Change to a plural noun
countries
Europe
agricultural Change noun form
Europe's
land
got degraged
the most by 23%. Taken over agricultural Correct your spelling
degraded
land
causes distributed
. 9,8% Replace the word
distribution
land
Change preposition
of land
degraded
because of deforestation, 7,7% because of Add a missing verb
is degraded
over-cultivation
and 5,5% caused by over-grazing.
Following Europe, Oceania
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Oceania's
land
got degrade
by 13%. Mainly caused by over-grazing.
And Wrong verb form
degraded
lastly
in North America, main
contributor Add an article
the main
of
degradation impacted by Change preposition
to
over-cultivation
. North America
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America's
land
got the lowest total land
degradation only by 5%.
We can conclude that,
agricultural Remove the comma
apply
land
needed to Add a missing verb
be rearrage
rearrage
for agricultural beneficial purposes.Correct your spelling
rearrange
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