It has been observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects at university.what do you think are the causes of the problem? what are the effects on society?

The number of
students
who choose to major in
science
subjects for higher education
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decreasing day by day in some countries. There are several reasons for
this
incident,
as well as
a couple of negative consequences. The main cause for
decline
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in
science
major's
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selection is that these lessons are fiendishly difficult to learn and pass,
also
students
have to study a sheer volume of complex lessons, which is a daunting task.
Due to
this
hardiness, many
students
cannot put up with
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and cope with
them
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. Another cause for why many
students
do not select these
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of study is that these subjects
are
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not
appeals
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appeal
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to them.
In other words
, pupils find their talents and interests in other majors which some of them do not need to attend any universities. Turning to possible effects which could
rise
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arise
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from
this
happening, the first thing that should be noted is that there is a myriad of carriers
position
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in a society which
need
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skillful
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people who have
been
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graduated
from
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science
subject. If there are not enough professionals, industrials could face many troubles which lead to economic problems.
Moreover
,
this
shortage in
work force
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may cause
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to
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recruitments
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recruitment
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of employee
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of employee
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employees
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employee
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employees
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from other nationalities which
make
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some changes and difficulties in society's condition.
For instance
, language
barrier
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barriers
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and culture shock can be some of these problems. In conclusion, there are several causes for
this
happening mostly oriented around the hardiness of
science
subjects and difficulties to pass these
corses
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courses
, and
also
a couple of noticeable negative effects for the industrials and society.
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