It has been observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects at university.what do you think are the causes of the problem? what are the effects on society?

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The number of

students

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who choose to major in

science

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subjects for higher education

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decreasing day by day in some countries. There are several reasons for

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incident,

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a couple of negative consequences. The main cause for

decline

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science

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selection is that these lessons are fiendishly difficult to learn and pass,

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students

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have to study a sheer volume of complex lessons, which is a daunting task.

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hardiness, many

students

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cannot put up with

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. Another cause for why many

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do not select these

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of study is that these subjects

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not

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to them.

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, pupils find their talents and interests in other majors which some of them do not need to attend any universities. Turning to possible effects which could

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from

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happening, the first thing that should be noted is that there is a myriad of carriers

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in a society which

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people who have

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science

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subject. If there are not enough professionals, industrials could face many troubles which lead to economic problems.

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shortage in

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may cause

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recruitments

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of employee

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of employee

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employees

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from other nationalities which

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some changes and difficulties in society's condition.

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, language

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and culture shock can be some of these problems. In conclusion, there are several causes for

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happening mostly oriented around the hardiness of

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subjects and difficulties to pass these

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courses

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a couple of noticeable negative effects for the industrials and society.

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task achievement

The essay addressed both parts of the tasks, looking at causes and effects of the issue. However, the ideas would benefit from further development and more specific supporting examples. Remember to address why these causes lead to reduced interest in science subjects and provide clearer examples or evidence to illustrate the effects on society.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

263 words

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Your opinion

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