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The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given illustration
figures
Verb problem
shows
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 the procedure of brick manufacturing for the construction industry. It involves
preparation
Correct article usage
the preparation
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 of
clay
Use synonyms
,
molding
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moulding
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, dying, burning and cooling. As we can
seen
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see
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 in the picture three main raw materials
has
Verb problem
are
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 used to make
bricks
Use synonyms
.They are pure
clay
Use synonyms
,sand and water. At
first,
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as per the image large digger is used to dig
clay
Use synonyms
 from the ground .
Those
Correct determiner usage
The
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clay
Use synonyms
going
Wrong verb form
goes
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 through
a metal grids
Correct the article-noun agreement
a metal grid
metal grids
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 to
getting
Wrong verb form
get
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 the impurities out
and
Correct word choice
apply
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make them
to
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into
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 small chunks and mix them with
sands
Fix the agreement mistake
sand
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 and water.
Secondly
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, to get a proper cubic shape the mixture
pour
Wrong verb form
is poured
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to
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into
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 a mould or by using a wire cutter they get the shape of
bricks
Use synonyms
.
Afterwards
Add a comma
Afterwards,
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 those
bricks
Use synonyms
are dying
Wrong verb form
die
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 in
a
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an
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 oven for around 24 to 48 hours.
Thereafter
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 these stones
needs
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need
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 to burn at
a
Correct article usage
apply
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moderate and high
tempratures
Correct your spelling
temperatures
 in a klin.200 to 980
celcius
Correct your spelling
celsius
 temperature
used
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is used
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 as moderate heat and 870 to 1300
celcius
Correct your spelling
celsius
 as high temperature.
Then
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 the cooling chamber makes them
to be
Verb problem
apply
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cool.they
kept
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were kept
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 in there for approximately 3 days.
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Finally
Add a comma
Finally,
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bricks
Use synonyms
 are packed and ready to deliver.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words clay, bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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