The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The given illustration
figures
the procedure of brick manufacturing for the construction industry.
It involves Verb problem
shows
preparation
of Correct article usage
the preparation
clay
, molding
, dying, burning and cooling.
As we can Change the spelling
moulding
seen
in the picture three main raw materials Change the verb form
see
has
used to make Verb problem
are
bricks
.They are pure clay
,sand and water. At first,
as per the image large digger is used to dig clay
from the ground .Those
Correct determiner usage
The
clay
going
through Wrong verb form
goes
a metal grids
to Correct the article-noun agreement
a metal grid
metal grids
getting
the impurities out Wrong verb form
get
and
make them Correct word choice
apply
to
small chunks and mix them with Change preposition
into
sands
and water. Fix the agreement mistake
sand
Secondly
, to get a proper cubic shape the mixture pour
Wrong verb form
is poured
to
a mould or by using a wire cutter they get the shape of Change preposition
into
bricks
.Afterwards
those Add a comma
Afterwards,
bricks
are dying
in Wrong verb form
die
a
oven for around 24 to 48 hours.
Change the article
an
Thereafter
these stones needs
to burn at Change the verb form
need
a
moderate and high Correct article usage
apply
tempratures
in a klin.200 to 980 Correct your spelling
temperatures
celcius
temperature Correct your spelling
celsius
used
as moderate heat and 870 to 1300 Add a missing verb
is used
celcius
as high temperature.Correct your spelling
celsius
Then
the cooling chamber makes them to be
cool.they Verb problem
apply
kept
in there for approximately 3 days. Add a missing verb
were kept
Finally
Add a comma
Finally,
bricks
are packed and ready to deliver.Submitted by P.Erandi
on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words clay, bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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