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The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library’s manager. In your letter include: - A brief introduction of yourself - Your experience and relevant skills - Why you want the job

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Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing to apply for the
job
of
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 the school library during
this
 summer vacation. My name is John, and I am a sophomore in
this
 school. I am an ardent, easy-going, and extrovert person, who
are
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 always willing to help others,
as well as
excell
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excel
 in classifying items, especially books and magazines. Not
onily
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only
this
, I have three years
part-time
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job
 experience
of
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 the library, and one year experience of working
on
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convenience
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 store.
Moreover
, I believe that I can be
a foremost candidates
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a foremost candidate
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 for qualifying
this
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job
. What's more, I heard that the small room of the library will
be
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hold a simple but delicacy painting exhibition.
Also
, I have
experiences
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 hosting similar activities, so absolutely I can
assisting
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 with it. It must be a challenge for me to explore
the
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other
field
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, either dynamic or art activities. In fact, I am truly a
book worm
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, if you give me a chance to employ
this
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job
, I will be over the moon and feel successful
to
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this
enviornment
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environment
.
Your
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 Sincerely John Chang
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coherence cohesion
Ensure clear structure with paragraphing, each expressing a clear central idea.
task achievement
Maintain a formal and polite tone throughout the letter as expected in a job application.
coherence cohesion
Open with an appropriate greeting and close with a formal sign-off in alignment with the format of a formal letter.
task achievement
Address each point in the task clearly and develop it appropriately, providing specific examples and reasons where applicable.
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