The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
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The bar chart depicts the numbers of married men and married women who doing unpaid work cars for
kids
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and chores, with three conditions without
children
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, With 1-2
children
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, more than 3
children
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.Clear noticed that married women take the highest rate. Without
children
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's parents,
females
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they took the lowest number 30 compared with the other conditions, Males they took lower than
females
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less than 20 as have no
kids
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. With 1-2
kids
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parents, For males, they recorded as same as Without
kids
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men less than 20.
Females
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They had increased to more than 50, So that means more chores with more
children
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. With more than 3
kids
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parents, the women had uplifted to more than
Females
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With 1-2
children
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and less than 60 hours,
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that reflecting on big families as cleaning and cooking, The unpaid hours each week had dropped to less than two past conditions for Men so that they should to work more for paid hours to can afford the family needs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • unpaid work
  • categories
  • average hours
  • men
  • women
  • comparison
  • overview
  • highest
  • differences
  • reasons
  • childcare
  • housework
  • gardening
  • gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • cultural norms
  • work-life balance
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