As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

Some
poeple
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people
believe that
people
spend the majority of their adult
life
at
work
,
job
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and job
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satisfaction
is
an
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significant part of personal well-being. There is considerable assertion which is about
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contribution to human
life
from
job
satisfaction
, what
can
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factors of
this
and
situation
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the situation
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in the expectation of all
workers
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satisfaction
will share following in the text.
To begin
with,
adult
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lives
of
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people
start to find a
job
and
then
continiue
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continue
improve
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during their
life
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.
Initially
,
while
poeple
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people
spend
the
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most of their time
for
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working, they can
be
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have
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some expectations in exchange for
the
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this
satisfaction
. If their
work
enable
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to
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good salary opportunities which
is
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are
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enough to meet a need for their daily
life
,
such
as their
life
expenses or leisure time activities, it would
be make
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make
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these
people
more
satisfy
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satisfied
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.
In addition
, if
people
had a
change
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chance
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to do
work
they love, they can become not only
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but
also
willing to improve and develop themselves in their field.
Moreover
, expecting all employees to be completely satisfied may not realistic perspective. Each of the individual have different
expectation
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expectations
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and will about both their personal lives and professional lives.
Therefore
, it is not impossible that make all
people
please with the same conditions. Take a group of
people
, who
work
for the same cooperation,
for example
; some of them can want to
work
at the weekend
instead
of working
week day
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weekday
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,
others
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while others
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,
on the contrary
, may prefer to allocate their weekend for their own.
To conclude
, there are some factors that enhance to
please
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of
work
,
such
as
,
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salary and working
job
they want.
In addition
,
satisfy
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satisfying
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all employees at the same time does not
seems
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possible.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay lacks a coherent and logical structure. Each paragraph must have a clear central idea which is expanded with relevant supporting details. Ensure you write clearly defined introductions, body paragraphs, and conclusions.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present but not effective. Clarify your position and summarise main points in both paragraphs to give the reader a better understanding of your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Develop your main points with specific examples and explanations. Just stating a factor is not sufficient; you must explore how and why it contributes to job satisfaction to give depth to your argument.
Task Achievement
You need to ensure that you completely respond to all parts of the task. While you have attempted to address both elements of the question, your response lacks depth and development.
Task Achievement
Your ideas are somewhat clear but not comprehensive. Work on fully developing your thoughts and presenting them in a more structured manner for the reader to follow.
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Include relevant, specific examples to strengthen your arguments. These examples help to illustrate your points and make your essay more convincing.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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