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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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Some
poeple
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people
 believe that
people
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 spend the majority of their adult
life
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 at
work
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,
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job
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and job
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satisfaction
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 is
an
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 significant part of personal well-being. There is considerable assertion which is about
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contribution to human
life
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 from
job
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satisfaction
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, what
can
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factors of
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 and
situation
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the situation
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 in the expectation of all
workers
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worker's
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satisfaction
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 will share following in the text.
To begin
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 with,
adult
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 lives
of
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people
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 start to find a
job
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 and
then
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continiue
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continue
improve
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 during their
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life
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lives
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.
Initially
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,
while
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poeple
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people
 spend
the
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apply
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most of their time
for
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working, they can
be
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have
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 some expectations in exchange for
the
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this
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satisfaction
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. If their
work
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enable
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to
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apply
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good salary opportunities which
is
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are
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 enough to meet a need for their daily
life
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,
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 as their
life
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 expenses or leisure time activities, it would
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 these
people
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 more
satisfy
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.
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, if
people
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 had a
change
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chance
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 to do
work
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 they love, they can become not only
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 but
also
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 willing to improve and develop themselves in their field.
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, expecting all employees to be completely satisfied may not realistic perspective. Each of the individual have different
expectation
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expectations
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 and will about both their personal lives and professional lives.
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, it is not impossible that make all
people
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 please with the same conditions. Take a group of
people
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, who
work
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 for the same cooperation,
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; some of them can want to
work
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 at the weekend
instead
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 of working
week day
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weekday
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,
others
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while others
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,
on the contrary
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, may prefer to allocate their weekend for their own.
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, there are some factors that enhance to
please
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 of
work
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,
such
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 as
,
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 salary and working
job
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 they want.
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,
satisfy
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satisfying
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 all employees at the same time does not
seems
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 possible.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay lacks a coherent and logical structure. Each paragraph must have a clear central idea which is expanded with relevant supporting details. Ensure you write clearly defined introductions, body paragraphs, and conclusions.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present but not effective. Clarify your position and summarise main points in both paragraphs to give the reader a better understanding of your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Develop your main points with specific examples and explanations. Just stating a factor is not sufficient; you must explore how and why it contributes to job satisfaction to give depth to your argument.
Task Achievement
You need to ensure that you completely respond to all parts of the task. While you have attempted to address both elements of the question, your response lacks depth and development.
Task Achievement
Your ideas are somewhat clear but not comprehensive. Work on fully developing your thoughts and presenting them in a more structured manner for the reader to follow.
Task Achievement
Include relevant, specific examples to strengthen your arguments. These examples help to illustrate your points and make your essay more convincing.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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