The pie charts compare the amount of online shopping sales for retail parts in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Moreover, those are divided into four categories: travel, film/music, book, and clothes.

The pie charts compare the amount of online shopping sales for retail parts in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Moreover, those are divided into four categories: travel, film/music, book, and clothes.
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The provided pie charts illustrate the contribution of four different categories of online shopping in New Zealand in two separate years: 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, it is clearly observable that in 2003,
travel
was the most popular sector among consumers in New Zealand,
whereas
in 2013, the film/music category accounted for the most prominent
sales
. In 2003, the percentages of
sales
for
travel
and clothes, which were the most popular groups in
this
year, stood at 36% and 24%, respectively,
whereas
those of films/music and books sectors were lower at approximately 20%. From
this
year until 2013, the proportions of
sales
associated with both film/music and books saw a growth of 12% and 3%, respectively.
By contrast
, the money
that is
earned from two other sectors,
travel
and clothes, experienced a downtrend, where the figure for
sales
of
travel
fell by 7% and that for clothes declined from nearly one-quarter to one-sixth, making it the least attractive shopping category in 2013.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words travel, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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