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The line chart below shows the annual fish consumption per capita in various regions from 1980 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the annual fish consumption per capita in various regions from 1980 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the annual fish consumption per
categories
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 in various places in 40 years from 1980 to 2020. in general, it can be seen that all regions (
Asia
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,
Europe
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, North
America
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 and South
America
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) showed an upward trend with
Asia
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reached
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 the highest number
while
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 South
America
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 was the smallest. In 1980,
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there's
 a slightly different
in
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Asia
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 (under 20) and
Europe
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 (at 20).
in
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 1990,
Asia
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 experienced far fewer
from
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than
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asia
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 just about 25 and both
Asia
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 and
Europe
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rise
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 gradually.
in
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 2010 to 2020,
Asia
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 increased significantly under 55 and
get
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 the highest fish consumption. Same as
Asia
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 and
Europe
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, both North and South
America
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 went up significantly, from
at
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10 and under 10 in 1980 and
end
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with
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 above 25 and at 30, respectively. From the lone chart can be seen that in 2010, North
America
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 and South
America
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 reached the same number just about 25.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia, europe, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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