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Band 4

The natural resources, such as oil, forests, and fresh water, are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does it cause? How can we solve these problems?

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Introduction
There is no denying the fact that
,
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 the natural
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sources
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resources
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 in
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the envirnment
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envirnment
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environment
is
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are
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 arguable. It is
commonly
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 that belief that fresh water and
foests
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forests
are increase
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use
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it
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in order to reach to
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warning
learning
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 many factors that impact negatively and reasons. I
provides
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soluations
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solutions
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 dilemma.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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fuel
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 has become increase consuming the natural
sources
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.
Although
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 energy can
take
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be taken
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it
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from other
resorce shuch
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resources such
 as
sun
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 in order to
presedve
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preserve
environment
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the environment
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In addition
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energye
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energy
 helps an individual to expand
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 ability to
avoiding rely
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 on natural
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source
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Body paragraph 2
Also
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, Indestrial
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is
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 more useful as similar
as
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 natural
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source
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 but it is
consedered
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considered
 renewal
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.
Furthermore
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, cutting trees for
using
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 in firewood or wood as furniture has become
worest
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worst
 of
forest
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the forest
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For instance
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, some people
using
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firewoods
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firewood
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for warming
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 themself or cooking food as
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an entertiment
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entertiment
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entertainment
 issue.
Body paragraph 3
Despit
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Despite
this
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spreads
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 of
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this
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 problems, the solution
depend
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firstly
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indivisual
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individual
 awareness. It is
also
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 possible to say that if everyone has
resopnsible
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the responsibility
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 to preserve
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the enviroenmt
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enviroenmt
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environment
thus
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, will decrease
consuming
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the consumption of
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 natural
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sources
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resources
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.
On the other hand
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 the
organisaionr
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organisation
 has the role of soulustion, for
examle
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example
, after
puting
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putting
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rulss
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rules
 and
obligation
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obligations
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 for consuming
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then
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they
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 must put a punshment for not
follow
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following
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instruction
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,
moreover
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, providing tax to pay
moeny
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money
 who
consuming
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 use it.
Additianly
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, the
curriculay
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curricular
curricula
curriculum
 could
provides
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an explination
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explination
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explanation
 of
importance
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 of
preserve
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preserving
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the environmet
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environmet
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environment
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Conclusion
In conclusion.
It is clear that
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 there are many
challanging
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challenging
consime
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consume
 the
nautural
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natural
source
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. And steps need to be taken to tackle
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this problems
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this problem
these problems
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 are
covernment
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government
 and
orgnisation
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organisation
 work on tax and
fess
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fees
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 for non follow
instracution
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instruction
instructions
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear structure, with ideas not flowing logically from one to the next. Ensure each paragraph contains one main idea and is clearly separated from others, aiding the reader in understanding your points.
coherence cohesion
There were no clear introductory or concluding paragraphs. An effective essay should begin with an introduction that paraphrases the question and states your main points, and end with a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your position.
coherence cohesion
Main points should be supported with specific examples and explanations. The essay included some general statements, but these require supporting details to show how they relate to the topic.
task achievement
Although you attempted to address the prompt, your response was difficult to follow and often tangential. Make sure to directly address the question by stating the problems and offering specific solutions, then expand on these with examples and clear reasoning.
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Your ideas were not communicated clearly and comprehensively. Work on developing your points more fully and explaining how they answer the question. Avoid vague language and make sure your writing is easy to follow.
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The use of examples is crucial for illustrating your points. However, many of the examples provided were either not fully relevant to the prompt or not developed sufficiently. Focus on providing pertinent examples that reinforce your arguments.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • non-renewable resources
  • economic instability
  • water shortages
  • agricultural production
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • global warming
  • sustainable management
  • conservation
  • alternative energy
  • afforestation
  • reforestation
  • water conservation
  • responsible consumption
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