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The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie chart represents the
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global production by sector from 2040 to 2060. The chart projected per cent based on 6 global production
categories
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There are
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 remain the same in the proportions across all six
categories
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 over the next 20 years. In 2
categories
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 services and manufacturing are the 2 items accounting for the highest proportions. The forecast shows that
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 increase in the services from 40
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in 2040 to 41
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 in 2060. The
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, the projection indicates that
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 will be a slow
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manufacturing from 31
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 in 2040 to 33
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 in 2060. In 2 items are energy and Info-Com Tech accounting for 7
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 and 15
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 respectively in 2040, and projected to shift to 5
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 and 16
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 by 2060. Materials and Agriculture are the two
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 accounting for the lowest
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. They are projected to stand at 3
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 respectively in 2040; by 2060, the figure for Materials is expected to rise slightly from 3
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, percent, percnet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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