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Ine chart perow snows ine number or trips made py chuaren in one country in togeT to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Ine chart perow snows ine number or trips made py chuaren in one country in togeT to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#ine #perow #snows #trips #py #chuaren #country #toget #travel #school #modes #transport #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The
gragh
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graph
 depicts the rate of commuting which
has
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was
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 done by students who were
5-12years
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5-12 years
 old in a particular country in two different years in 1990 and 2010 and the modes of travelling to school or from it.
Overall
, as
it
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apply
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can be seen walking was the most popular way of commuting for students in 1990 ,
whereas
 cycling had the lowest fan in the same year
as well
as
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and
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 in 2010 using car
passenger
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passengers
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 had the greatest level of
usning
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usage
 among children's
school
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schools
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.
According to
 the given chart,
walking
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the walking
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 method experienced a dramatic fall from 12.5
from
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to 6milions
in
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apply
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per year,
also
 cycling walking and bus and using
bus
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the bus
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 tended to downwards in comparison with the two previous decades. Turning to the given chart, using car
passenger
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passengers
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 had a noticeable growth rather than the other items for travelling,
while
 using cycling declined
into
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by
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 one third in comparison with 1990.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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