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The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportions of men and women teachers in six various kinds of educational
institution
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 in the UK in 2010.
Overall
, there are six types of educational organizations in Britain with the highest difference between men and women in Nursery/Pre-School, Primary School and University. Turning to the details, the first two educational categories
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 are Nursery/Pre-School and Primary school had
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 significant difference between men and women
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reaching the percentage of the latter one
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 was approximately 90% which was 20 and 10 times higher than
male
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males
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. As for the second category, which is male, we can see that with the rising
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level of
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education,
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this
 category started to be dominant in the
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 was University, reaching almost 70%.
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 percentage was twice
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than
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 the
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one
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. Considering the other three categories, they were almost equal with the proportion of almost
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half in both genders.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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