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the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010.

the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts below illustrate the number of British
students
Use synonyms
 at one university in England who spoke other
languages
Use synonyms
in addition
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 to English over a ten-year period between 2000 and 2010. In general, it can be seen that there was a significant downward trend in
students
Use synonyms
 who could speak French. In 2000, German and two other
languages
Use synonyms
 had the lowest percentages among all of them.
However
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, the German language was the only one that remained stable after 10 years. There was a considerable rise in Spanish, which was the most popular language among
students
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 over a decade. As you can see, there was an upward trend in Two other and Another
languages
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, which meant
students
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 in 2010 were from all around the globe. There was a sharp rise in
students
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 who could speak at least two
languages
Use synonyms
 after ten years.
Finally
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, Spanish was still the most popular language among all of them.
Nonetheless
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, French was less popular, and
also
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 German was still the same after a decade.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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