The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figure gives information about the monthly price changes of Copper,Nickel and Zinc in 2014.
Overall
, Nickel had the most change and the other materials fluctuated in that year. Primarily,Nickel had a 6per cent difference
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the previous month but it had a significant fall in the next five months and
finally
stopped with the percentage of -3 .
Then
, the line remained constant until September and in November and
December
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to around one per cent.
On the other hand
, The two other metals
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had some slight rises and drops during 2014. The most stable material was Copper and it was generally near a percent.
Moreover
, in May and
June
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it
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zero.The
last
material had the least price fluctuation at the beginning
however
, in the next month
this
parameter became three times more and in the two final months of 2014 it became the most unstable metal.
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  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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