The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table and chart below respectively show the consequence of a survey about how many percentages
people
consume
Wrong verb form
consumed
tea
or coffee
, during last
4 weeks in five Australian cities.
Correct article usage
the last
Overall
, Although
, many of
Change preposition
apply
people
visited cafe
Fix the agreement mistake
cafes
for bought
both Change preposition
to buy
of
Change preposition
apply
the
drinks during that period time, at least in 4 cities except Adelaide, we have Correct article usage
apply
another results
about Replace the adjective
another result
other results
people
who just visited there for bought
Change preposition
to buy
instant
or fresh coffee
.
In Melbourne and Hobart
63% of Add a comma
Hobart,
people
vistited
for drank Correct your spelling
visited
tea
or coffee
, However
, after that, survey
shows us that Correct article usage
a survey
drank
Wrong verb form
drinking
instant
coffee
in Hobalt
and Melbourne is more popular than fresh Correct your spelling
Hobart
coffees
. Fix the agreement mistake
coffee
This
results estimated, Correct determiner usage
These
in
Hobalt, 54% of Correct word choice
that in
people
paid for instant
coffee
and just 38% paid for fresh coffee
in last
4 weeks. Correct article usage
the last
Also
in Melbourne survey outcomes is
48% Unnecessary verb
apply
people
bought Change preposition
of people
instant
coffee
and 43% bought fresh coffee
. Consequently
,Correct article usage
the
diffrent
in Hobalt Correct your spelling
different
is
more remarkable.
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Likewise
, we have three another
cities. In Sydney and Brisbane Correct quantifier usage
other
consume
Verb problem
apply
coffee
and tea
, in order was 61% and 56%, on the contrary
, In Brisbane 54% of people
bought instant
coffee
and merely 34% keen
to buy fresh Add a missing verb
were keen
coffee
. Whereas
, In Sydney 46% bought instant
coffee
and 43% prefer
fresh Wrong verb form
preferred
coffee
, Then
, diversity
of consume different drinks in Correct article usage
the diversity
this
city is more than Brisbane
. And Change preposition
in Brisbane
at
Change preposition
apply
last
, we can see results
of Adelaide city that 50% of Correct article usage
the results
people
more
enjoy Correct quantifier usage
apply
drank
Wrong verb form
drinking
instant
coffee
and close to it, 49% bought coffee
or tea
, in 4 last
weeks and just 34% paid money for fresh Correct word choice
apply
coffees
.Fix the agreement mistake
coffee
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, tea, coffee, instant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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