The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The table and chart below respectively show the consequence of a survey about how many
people
consume
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consumed
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tea
or
coffee
, during
last
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the last
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4 weeks in five Australian cities.
Overall
,
Although
, many
of
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apply
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people
visited
cafe
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cafes
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for bought
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to buy
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both
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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drinks during that period time, at least in 4 cities except Adelaide, we have
another results
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another result
other results
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about
people
who just visited there
for bought
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to buy
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instant
or fresh
coffee
. In Melbourne and
Hobart
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Hobart,
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63% of
people
vistited
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visited
for drank
tea
or
coffee
,
However
, after that,
survey
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a survey
show examples
shows us that
drank
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drinking
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instant
coffee
in
Hobalt
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Hobart
and Melbourne is more popular than fresh
coffees
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coffee
show examples
.
This
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These
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results estimated,
in
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that in
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Hobalt, 54% of
people
paid for
instant
coffee
and just 38% paid for fresh
coffee
in
last
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the last
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4 weeks.
Also
in Melbourne survey outcomes
is
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apply
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48%
people
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of people
show examples
bought
instant
coffee
and 43% bought fresh
coffee
.
Consequently
,
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the
show examples
percentages
diffrent
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different
in Hobalt
is
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are
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more remarkable.
Likewise
, we have three
another
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other
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cities. In Sydney and Brisbane
consume
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apply
show examples
coffee
and
tea
, in order was 61% and 56%,
on the contrary
, In Brisbane 54% of
people
bought
instant
coffee
and merely 34%
keen
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were keen
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to buy fresh
coffee
.
Whereas
, In Sydney 46% bought
instant
coffee
and 43%
prefer
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preferred
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fresh
coffee
,
Then
,
diversity
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the diversity
show examples
of consume different drinks in
this
city is more than
Brisbane
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in Brisbane
show examples
. And
at
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apply
show examples
last
, we can see
results
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the results
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of Adelaide city that 50% of
people
more
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apply
show examples
enjoy
drank
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drinking
show examples
instant
coffee
and close to it, 49% bought
coffee
or
tea
, in 4
last
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apply
show examples
weeks and just 34% paid money for fresh
coffees
Fix the agreement mistake
coffee
show examples
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, tea, coffee, instant with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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