The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented bar chart delineates the changes in the exercise habits of male and female communities in various six groups which show ages.
Firstly
, we analyse that clearly at first glance, the
community
with the highest bar in
females
is 45 to 54.
On the other hand
, the highest bar among males is 15 to 34 . When the
females
and males were 65 and over , their rates were roughly equal and the other significant point is the male
community
was higher than the female
community
only
in
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25 to 34.
Secondly
, It is explicitly observed that the proportion of
females
in 35 to 44 is nearly fifty in every hundred ( %39.5),
thus
, it is
this
rate that made its position the lowest level among
females
.
Furthermore
, In
this
age group ,
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male has the third highest rate with roughly fifty-three individuals in every hundred (%53.3) and their percentages are highly different.
Besides
, after the 35 to 44 male
community
caught an
increase
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tendency mildly.
Nonetheless
, the female
community
lost their remained stable position after 55 to 64 and decreased abruptly.
Overall
, Rises
were
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in the male category maintained smoothly
while
getting older
in contrast
to the decline of female tendency.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words community, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
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