The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart delineates the changes in the exercise habits of male and female communities in various six groups which show ages.
male has the third highest rate with roughly fifty-three individuals in every hundred (%53.3) and their percentages are highly different.
Firstly
, we analyse that clearly at first glance, the community
with the highest bar in females
is 45 to 54. On the other hand
, the highest bar among males is 15 to 34 . When the females
and males were 65 and over , their rates were roughly equal and the other significant point is the male community
was higher than the female community
only in
25 to 34.
Change preposition
apply
Secondly
, It is explicitly observed that the proportion of females
in 35 to 44 is nearly fifty in every hundred ( %39.5), thus
, it is this
rate that made its position the lowest level among females
. Furthermore
, In this
age group ,Add an article
the
a
Besides
, after the 35 to 44 male community
caught an increase
tendency mildly. Change the verb form
increasing
Nonetheless
, the female community
lost their remained stable position after 55 to 64 and decreased abruptly.
Overall
, Rises were
in the male category maintained smoothly Unnecessary verb
apply
while
getting older in contrast
to the decline of female tendency.Submitted by ezgi.maide.213 on
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