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The bar chart below shows the percentage od Australian men an women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage od Australian men an women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph
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 the proportion of Australian men and
woman
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women
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 who did daily activity in the year
of
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2010. The units were measured in per cent and divided into six different
age
groups
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
female
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females
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was
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were
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 more active compared with
male
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males
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 in all
age
groups
, except in
age
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the age
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group
 of 15 to 24. In terms of
age
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the age
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group
 of 35 to 44,
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the lowest
percentage
 of
male
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males
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 who did
regular
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a regular
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 activity with just below 40%,
whereas
female
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females
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 accounted
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 52.5%. There were
age
groups
 of
male
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males
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 with
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percentages
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 below 46%, which were 55 to 64, 45 to 54, and 25 to 34. The
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 were at 45,1%, 43,1% and 42,2%, severally.
However
, those
age
groups
 have
higher
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 woman
percentage
 of regular activity, with number at 53%, 53,3%, and 48,9%. Regarding the 15 to 24
age
group
, the only different proportion compared with others, male
percentage
 were higher at 52,8% and female at 47,7%.
Lastly
,
65
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 and over
age
group
,
have
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 a slight difference with
female
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females
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 at just over 47% and
male
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males
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 at 46.7%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, group, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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