The bar chart below shows the percentage od Australian men an women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph depicts the proportion of Australian
male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
across various Fix the agreement mistake
females
age
brackets who engaged in physical activity in 2010.
Overall
, it is clearly apparent that women consistently exhibit a higher percentage than man
, with the exception of the 15 to 24 Fix the agreement mistake
men
age
group
.
Turning to the details, first in the15
to 24 Correct your spelling
the 15
group
, males
account for 52,8%, while
the females
make up for
47.7%. Change preposition
apply
This
category is the only one when
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where
males
overtook the
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apply
females
by approximately 13%. Furthermore
, for the next group
in
25 to 34, Change preposition
apply
males
percentage Correct article usage
the males
plummet
to 42.2%, Wrong verb form
plummeted
whereas
females
had gradual
rise to 48.9%. The Correct article usage
a gradual
males
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male
group
hit their bottommost point in
the Change preposition
at
age
35 to 44, it drop
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dropping
into
39,5% Change preposition
to
while
the females
soaring
to Wrong verb form
soared
its
peak Correct pronoun usage
their
in
the Change preposition
at
age
45 to 54 in
53.3%. Change preposition
at
lastly
, in the age
65 and over, this
two Correct determiner usage
these
category
almost tied with each other. Fix the agreement mistake
categories
mlaes
constitute Correct your spelling
males
in
46.7%, Change preposition
apply
whereas
females
represent 47.1%Submitted by nientjeninan on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, males, females with synonyms.
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